Friday, March 19, 2010

55-The Beggar



A shot in the heart
Bereft
Of life
Footsteps on the snow
Wind wafts
And they slowly fade

Empty of feeling
Dreaming of being
A distorted soul
Untouched by joy
Longing to sleep
And to drift away

Screams
Masked by silence
Disconnected
A rootless tree
Craves belonging
And just
Drowns in darkness
Begging for light

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21 comments:

  1. Wow! I had to read this over twice because there's so much to it. I initially thought it was about a physical murder, but now I'm thinking your poem speaks more to what it feels like to want death after being rejected by life.

    A very powerful 55!

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  2. I like the lines "screams masked by silence". I think we've all experienced that at least once in our lifetimes.

    Here's mine Take Pleasure - 101

    Have a super terrific weekend.

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  3. leaves me feeling very blessed...that i am rooted,,,

    and the light shines upon me, with a full and vibrant heart.

    today i shall view those in need with your work ever present.

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  4. powerful indeed! the soul is a lonely hunter... come to think of it 'the soul is a lonely hunter' is a great book (sorry, attention span).. great 55

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  5. This was definitely powerful.
    "A rootless tree
    Craves belonging"
    Beautiful.

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  6. The depth of this piece is outstanding, I had to read it twice. At first I thought it was murder, but with the second read, I believe it is speaking of a broken heart, and the ensuing wasteland of disconnected emotions and sorrow.

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  7. You write so well!
    Very good 55.

    Margie :)

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  8. A well written 55. All is bleak but one should never give up hope. There will be light.

    Thanks for visiting and commenting on
    My 55: My Invisibility

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  9. Untouched by joy/Longing to sleep.

    That was my Wednesday.

    This is a powerful piece. Well done. Thanks.

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  10. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/19/55-how-do-you-relax-during-weekends/

    mine is here.
    thank you for the feedback!

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  11. young but creative you,
    beautiful 55.

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  12. Maha, that was amazing. I especially loved the beginning of the second verse.

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  13. Whoa.. so profound.. each line!

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  14. i could read this one over and over...so much there...i scream sometimes...a bit late making the 55 rounds...hope you have a great weekend!

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  15. Thank you for your kind words and being a follower. :) hope to read more of your writing

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  16. There is so much emotion in this! Powerful indeed.

    My 55 is up here.

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  17. I love your style too Maha..it is different and takes your reader places,i enjoyed reading your work as much..keep it up,you are so talented my dear..:)

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  18. Sorry I'm so late. This is a beautiful 55. I enjoyed the imagery very much.

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  19. Don't worry! thanks for stopping by.

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  20. I'm thinking your poem speaks more to what it feels like to want death after being rejected by life.
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