Friday, June 11, 2010

Free of Thought



I hear the rhythm                                
Of your heartbeats
Eerie whispers
Those won’t but stay
And I pray I pray
That you shall fade
But still
I hold on

I line you now
Within my head
And write you
A thousand words
You will never read
But still
I see your eyes
Devouring yourself
Through my own

I touched you once
And wept forever
Condemned you then
To be a dream
But still
You are 
Too real for surreality 

20 comments:

  1. a desire so stron you wish to be released from it, yet cling...maha, you have such a brilliant way with words...you know this but...

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  2. Painful.

    And very well expressed.

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  3. "I touched you once
    and wept forever"

    ...sigh... so powerful.

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  4. I feel the bittersweet sadness here. The last stanza resonates a solemn finality. "I touched you once and wept forever. Condemned you then to be a dream..." What lovely poetic expression.

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  5. touched me....a desire so strong you wish to be released from it, yet cling...

    Wonderful

    Jim

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  6. A beautiful, passionate and eternally heartfelt poem, Maha. Oh the intoxicating insanity that is love, it does indeed inspire such yearning.

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  7. Beautiful... just beautiful.

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  8. painful yet intriging great style

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  9. really really impressive

    loved it..

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  10. This was breathtaking-especially the last stanza.

    Maha, truly, it was genius. :)

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  11. So Poignant! The words linger.

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  12. maha, your words cover me, changing me as i sit and try to fathom how your eves see what they see while my own vision is so limited?

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  13. I love Sam's take on your poem -"intoxicating insanity that is love,"

    You captured it so well -- my heartstrings are vibrating with your words remembering the lost love of mine own.....

    Beautiful,
    Joanny

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  14. Beautiful and strong! Love does crazy things to us, as you've so eloquently expressed.

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  15. And you are only 15? Perhaps it's ageist pf me to mention this but I am astonished at the power of your words for one so young.

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  16. Amazingly poignant. Love the way you expressed it. No words would justify the beauty of the poem.

    Lena

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  17. http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/07/19/the-celebrate-poet-of-june-award-plus-poetry-community-award/

    award notice,
    3 of them!

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