Drown with me in the heart of an old song that has no story but two who swore to let their souls be carved by melodies. It doesn’t have to be great, just sing along and let it seep and reach you under the skin.
You told me not to fight death when it comes, just let it kiss my soul gently and I won’t have to feel a thing. You told me to count to three and it would all be over. But I was not ready yet.
The shades of grey colored our world and we no longer had definite lines of black and white to guide us. Wherever our hearts pointed, we followed. We smashed the rules of life and threw it behind us. We were no rebellions, we were just lovers.
Now close your eyes and let our fingers intertwine. Clasp my hands tightly and let my bones break into yours. The words melt on the bridge of our lips so our souls whisper them
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let my bones break into yours...what sweet intensity...nice maha...
ReplyDeleteOh My Goodness...what a breathtakingly beautiful piece of writing Maha... you leave me speechless, you have such a talent for the written word.
ReplyDeletei don't know which of us started reading the other first, as i've been doing a lot of blogger browsing lately. but i do know i'm SO happy i came to this blog. your writing is so exquisite.
ReplyDeleteThis feels like a jump, just close your eyes and count to three. Beautiful.
ReplyDelete"just let it kiss my soul gently and I won’t have to feel a thing." pretty!
ReplyDeleteI feel like dancing in these words..
ReplyDeletei read your words, so full of passion and fire, and i think to myself why is it that i can't begin to grasp at the life you appear to possess with such ease? i peer into your world, not really touching it as one can dare to touch and feel the current of an electric fence, but more like peering into a snowglobe and wondering how the marvelous things i see got in there in the first place! maha, you touch my heart...
ReplyDeleteAnd you too touched my heart just now with your beautiful words, nobody ever talked about me like that , so thank you for being so amazing and making me feel loved. Really, I am so grateful to you.
ReplyDeleteyour opening grabbed me and it didn't let up till the end. what a piece!
ReplyDeleteWow. This is beautiful writing. This was amazing...:)
ReplyDeleteMaha, you have an amazing talent. This was a heartbreakingly beautiful piece. I am most struck by your ability to capture human tenderness, especially with such fluid words. A lovely image that will stay in my mind...
ReplyDeleteNevine
I am speechless
ReplyDeleteThe intensity, the sensuality, the insanity of love - it is all amazingly encapsulated in your mesmerizing words. This is beautiful, Maha, really beautiful.
ReplyDeleteWhat everyone said above is more then I could EVER write, and so I shall say no more. But I AM spellbound by your writing talent. Are you also a musician?
ReplyDeleteSoul. Songs. Melodies. We must be on the same frequency today. But your musings are far more beautiful than mine. I love "dark" prose. Such bittersweet sadness and passion in these words. You are young yet you hold the heart of a classic poet. Never let this talent go no matter who says what about it.
ReplyDeleteI love the title too!
PS: I think you should submit this to House of Horror:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.houseofhorror.org.uk/#/home/4534063502
Beautifully done...such an intensity here.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous piece!
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ReplyDeleteanother poetry award 4 u.
have a beautiful day!
I appreciate your uplifting comments and handsome spirits.
cheers!