Your oneness is gone as you thrust your heart between my ribs and let it beat the same. Solidity is forsaken. We melt into each other then slither down the cliffs of solitude. The violins of night sing their melody. My body loses half of its soul and wanders again in its desolate self. Alone.
I love the line, "The violins of night sing their melody." But are you united or parted?
ReplyDeletehaunting, yearning...i can almost hear the screams coming from a mouth that can't open. this was fascinating, maha, a great 55!
ReplyDeletethank you so much for taking the time to visit my granddaughters site...you have the insights to share what i cannot!
What a bizarre but effective desciption!
ReplyDeleteNice.
Magically sensual, the description is wonderful. Your 55s are always marvelous!
ReplyDeletedang...thrust your heart between my ribs...yet still alone in the end...this is beautiful sorrow.
ReplyDeleteI loved the ending-so beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSuch intimacy, such solitude. Such love. Well done.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous!
ReplyDeleteThose moments when two become one, yet only to shatter into broken two halves when their paths go separate ways. Alone indeed.
ReplyDeleteTouching 55 as always, Maha.
My 55 is We Stand There
I'm not sure if I should be glad or sad - the end result is - Alone!!!
ReplyDeleteNice 55
mine is at
http://wp.me/pDORjBa
Well done. Again... Powerful and strong and sad. I could feel it.
ReplyDeleteGreat 55! /Jo.
bizarre.
ReplyDeletebut beautiful.
really beautiful.
x
You must....no, really...I'm serious. You MUST seriously consider writing as a career!!!
ReplyDeleteMine is "LOST IN THE TRANSLATION"
Have a great weekend! [and as always, scroll down a bit to find my 55]
A beautiful melody in 55 words. I love your first line ~ so originally spoken. Fabulous job.
ReplyDeleteI'm up (with a few extra words):
Friday Flash 55 ~ Butterfly Kisses
The risks we all take in the pursuit of love. Brilliantly told, Maha!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant as always, Every word spoke to me, Great Piece
ReplyDeleteHaunting, but very nicely written!!
ReplyDeleteA very telling 55. Right from the soul.
ReplyDeleteThis started out happy then sad for me. Beautiful phrasing and descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteI gave you an award!!
ReplyDeleteless painful, more accessible, and with a sense of resolution on the horizon.
ReplyDeletekeep writing,
mine is up HERE
WOW..you are very talented.
ReplyDeletegreat 55!
Mine is here
Have a great weekend!
hugs
shakira