Standing
Nowhere
Melodies
Beautiful Wails
But no one will know
No one will hear
Words
Lost in the stream
Happily
The air
Shall carry them
Far Faraway
But they don’t look
They just see
A mermaid’s screams
Drowned by the sea
Let her die there alone
With no one to care
No one to know
ack. a mermaids screams...heartbreaking and cold...and no one to know. excellent 55.
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Wonderfully done. You managed to tug on my emotions in just 55 words.
ReplyDeleteNo one hears, no one looks, no one cares or knows. Very bleak 55, stirs the emotions.
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i want to launch my boat into the bleak sea...
ReplyDeleteand offer my aid to that aquatic creature...whose very soul cries in pain...!
How tragic, but beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteSo unfair! Where are the other mermaids?
ReplyDeleteGreat 55. Mine is here.
I don't like the sounds of a mermaid dying alone without anyone caring.
ReplyDeletea lonely, sombering scream that is...wonderful 55
ReplyDeleteMaha...
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THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!!!
WOW girl!
Excellent 55 My Dear.
This poem just cries a mournful lament..
Please play again next Friday...Galen
Beautiful. If a mermaid were to be described, this is the best way.
ReplyDeleteWow! What an intensely sad 55. So much evoked in so few words! Thanks for visiting mine!
ReplyDeletea beauty of a melancholy lryical poem. love!
ReplyDeleteExcellent 55ve Maha! Very thought provoking, visual and sensitive!
ReplyDeleteHow sad... And cold... My emotions flowing after reading this. Vivid images. You got that much said using only 55 words. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting on mine.
Peace and love/ Jo.
Poignant.. there’s pain in these lines!
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