I hear the rhythm
Of your heartbeats
Eerie whispers
Those won’t but stay
And I pray I pray
That you shall fade
But still
I hold on
I line you now
Within my head
And write you
A thousand words
You will never read
But still
I see your eyes
Devouring yourself
Through my own
I touched you once
And wept forever
And wept forever
Condemned you then
To be a dream
But still
You are
But still
You are
Too real for surreality
a desire so stron you wish to be released from it, yet cling...maha, you have such a brilliant way with words...you know this but...
ReplyDeleteamazing.
ReplyDeletethat's all.
Painful.
ReplyDeleteAnd very well expressed.
Painfully beautiful.
ReplyDelete"I touched you once
ReplyDeleteand wept forever"
...sigh... so powerful.
I feel the bittersweet sadness here. The last stanza resonates a solemn finality. "I touched you once and wept forever. Condemned you then to be a dream..." What lovely poetic expression.
ReplyDeletetouched me....a desire so strong you wish to be released from it, yet cling...
ReplyDeleteWonderful
Jim
A beautiful, passionate and eternally heartfelt poem, Maha. Oh the intoxicating insanity that is love, it does indeed inspire such yearning.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful... just beautiful.
ReplyDeletepainful yet intriging great style
ReplyDeletereally really impressive
ReplyDeleteloved it..
This was breathtaking-especially the last stanza.
ReplyDeleteMaha, truly, it was genius. :)
So Poignant! The words linger.
ReplyDeletemaha, your words cover me, changing me as i sit and try to fathom how your eves see what they see while my own vision is so limited?
ReplyDeleteI love Sam's take on your poem -"intoxicating insanity that is love,"
ReplyDeleteYou captured it so well -- my heartstrings are vibrating with your words remembering the lost love of mine own.....
Beautiful,
Joanny
Beautiful and strong! Love does crazy things to us, as you've so eloquently expressed.
ReplyDeletestrong force in you,
ReplyDeleteit is obvious!
And you are only 15? Perhaps it's ageist pf me to mention this but I am astonished at the power of your words for one so young.
ReplyDeleteAmazingly poignant. Love the way you expressed it. No words would justify the beauty of the poem.
ReplyDeleteLena
http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/07/19/the-celebrate-poet-of-june-award-plus-poetry-community-award/
ReplyDeleteaward notice,
3 of them!